Thursday, October 16, 2014
The Weather
Cloudy, windy, stormy, and freezing at outside. People, dogs, pigs, and ants are still sleeping and spending the freezing weather. Going outside is muddy, stinky, and yucky, I am sitting, looking, and observing things from inside the classroom. Trying to get a ride home, a vehicle ran over into a mud. I was all covered with mud and dirt. I was really mad for I got my bag wet. Going back to school for change. Have changed and I am feeling fresh right now. Rain stop, storm sleep, wind fade away, everything is in good shape now. I am off to bed.
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I still like the way you used commas. It plays with the sound a little bit. I also like how it started with something that is not really that good (cloudy, windy, stormy) and ended in a good note (rain stopped, etc.). Good work, Pam!
ReplyDeleteOkaay! Thank You.
ReplyDeleteNice use of adjectives and verbs when describing the weather. I can feel it now, the cold wind and rain with mud everywhere. My favorite line here is "rain stop, storm sleep, wind fade away..." It gives the weather characteristics that are normally not associated with rain and storms. I did have a hard time understanding what "spending the freezing weather" meant in the second sentence. Could you elaborate? Altogether though, nice story.
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